Autumn Writing

We have been learning to make our writing more interesting.To do this we have been re-crafting our writing we used Describe Map witch helps us plan our ideas in more detail .Our topic was Autumn Each time we used adjectives similes. These are highlighted so we can see our writing get better my favourite  part was puting in all of the adjectives and simles.

Attempt:1          Autumn is a season.It gets colder because winter is on the way.The leaves on the trees die so that new leaves can grow.Shorter days and longer nights because day light savings.The leaves full of the trees because they die.Some animals hibernate because its to cold for them.The leaves turn orange and brow because they are dying.

Attempt:2 Autumn  is a colorful and cold season.It gets colder because Icy winter is on the way.The crunchy silky leaves on the trees  die so that brand new baby leaves can Grow. Shorter days and longer dark nights Because of daylight savings.The dead leaves off the trees because they start to die.Some cute little animals hibernate because it is to cold for then so they go to a warmer county . The leaves turn orange and brown because they are slowly slowly dying

Attempt:3 Autumn is a colorful  and Icy season.It gets Icyer because freezing winter is on the way.The crunchy and silky leaves on the trees die so that  brand new baby leaves can grow. Shorter days and longer dark cold night because of daylight savings.The dead leaves off trees because they start to die.some adorable cute little animals hibernate because its to freezing cold for them so they go to a warmer county place.The leaves turn orange and brown because they are slowly slowly dying.

Attempt:4 Autumn is a wonderful season full of laughter and colors it also is a icy and cold  season.It gets colder and colder because freezing winter is on the way.The crunchy and silky leaves on the trees start to die so that brand new baby leaves can grow back.back. Shorter days and longer and dark cold nights because of daylight savings.The dead leaves off the trees start to die.Some adorable cute little animals hibernate because it is to freezing cold for them so they go to a warmer country or warmer place.The leaves turn orange and brown  because they are slowly slowly dying.

Attempt:5 Autumn is a wonderful season full of laughter and colors it also is a Icy and cold  season.It gets colder and colder because freezing winter is on the way.The crunchy and silky leaves on the trees as tall as drafts  start to die so that brand new baby leaves can grow back.Shorter days and longer and dark cold nights because of daylight savings.The dead leaves off the trees start to die.Some adorable cute little animals hibernate because it is to freezing cold for them so they go to a warmer country or warmer place.The leaves turn orange and brown  because they are slowly slowly dying